Please Tell me What You Think Of My Essay Answer?The question is:
Justify the reason why cardiovascular disease is one of the major national health priority areas in Australia.
Cardiovascular Disease is the number one killer disease, it also causes sever chronic conditions which is treated over a long period of time. With preventative medicine or treatment within a time frame, a patient probably, Could have been prevented, or problems be minimized. This is also one of the highest expenses medically for insurances/government.
Unlike many other chronic medical conditions, Cardiovascular disease is treatable and reversible, even after a long history of disease. Treatment is primarily focused on diet and stress reduction.
The heart needs a steady supply of blood to function effectively. Cardiovascular disease is a general term that describes conditions caused by an interrupted or diminished blood flow through the coronary arteries to the heart muscle. The main cardiovascular diseases are heart attack, angina, stroke and peripheral vascular disease (PVD). As a group, these diseases are the leading cause of death in Australia. In 2001, an estimated 3.2 million Australians, or 17 per cent of the population, suffered from cardiovascular conditions.
Tobacco smoking is considered a major risk factor for cardiovascular disease and nearly 40% of all the people who die from smoking die from heart, stroke or blood vessel (cardiovascular) disease. Research shows that both directly inhaled tobacco smoke and passively inhaled tobacco smoke increase the risk of developing cardiovascular disease.
Smoking increases the artery clogging process called atherosclerosis. The narrowing of the arteries limits blood-flow and means that less oxygen is supplied to the body. If atherosclerosis narrows any of the heart's coronary blood vessels, this can lead to angina or a heart attack. Stroke occurs when an artery supplying blood to a part of the brain suddenly becomes blocked. There is no 'low-risk' level of smoking; both 'social' smoking (less than five grams of tobacco per day) and smoking without inhaling increase the risk of heart disease.
Smokers are more likely to develop a cerebral thrombosis (stroke) than non-smokers. About 11% of all stroke deaths are estimated to be smoking related, with the overall relative risk of stroke in smokers being about 1.5 times that of non-smokers. Heavy smokers (consuming 20 or more cigarettes a day) have 2-4 times greater risk of stroke than non-smokers. A recent study showed that passive smoking, as well as active smoking, significantly increased the risk of stroke in men and women.
It's never too late to quit smoking, even if you already have some form of cardiovascular disease. Quitting smoking is the best investment you can make in your health. The sooner you quit the better. Even if you have already experienced some health damage caused by smoking it is still possible to reverse some of the effects.
Quitting can reduce the chance of having a repeat heart attack or stroke and other forms of heart disease. After quitting, the risk of stroke may return to the level of someone who has never smoked within five years. Fifteen years after quitting, the risk of heart disease is similar to that of a person who has never smoked.
Ok Do you think thats right, tell me what I need to fix 20% of this goes towards my HSC mark so its important for me that I pass thank you:)
Peter
You have most of the facts but you need to organize them and fix your grammar. Follow the rules for paragraphs and put similar facts together in them.
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